Comments for Mr. D 90 http://mrd90.edublogs.org A3WP- where it is all writing, all the time Tue, 13 Oct 2009 03:18:48 -0400 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.2 hourly 1 Comment on 2. Ahmad’s First Day of School by Carter http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/ahmads-first-day-of-school/comment-page-1/#comment-353 Carter Tue, 13 Oct 2009 03:18:48 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/ahmads-first-day-of-school/#comment-353 The Day with Ahmad One morning, I was arriving to school and I saw Ahmad sitting at a table. He seemed to be waiting for someone. I went to greet him, but he ran away. I guess he was shy, so I decided to follow him. It took a while to catch up to him and then I explained that we were in the same class. I said I could show him around school. He agreed and we went to see our classroom. After showing him his cubby, the bell rang, signaling it was time for class. At recess, I took Ahmad to the baseball and soccer fields. He smiled and said he loved playing sports. Next, we walked across the black top to the cafeteria, but the bell rang so our tour was cut short again. Our class lined up and we walked to Room 3. At the end of the day, Ahmed came up to me and said he had the greatest day of his life. The bell rang and we said goodbye. The Day with Ahmad

One morning, I was arriving to school and I saw Ahmad sitting at a table. He seemed to be waiting for someone. I went to greet him, but he ran away. I guess he was shy, so I decided to follow him. It took a while to catch up to him and then I explained that we were in the same class. I said I could show him around school. He agreed and we went to see our classroom. After showing him his cubby, the bell rang, signaling it was time for class.

At recess, I took Ahmad to the baseball and soccer fields. He smiled and said he loved playing sports. Next, we walked across the black top to the cafeteria, but the bell rang so our tour was cut short again. Our class lined up and we walked to Room 3.

At the end of the day, Ahmed came up to me and said he had the greatest day of his life. The bell rang and we said goodbye.

]]> Comment on 1. Vacation Paper by Gabrielle http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/where-is-this/comment-page-1/#comment-352 Gabrielle Fri, 18 Sep 2009 17:24:25 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/where-is-this/#comment-352 Death Falls Camp Gabrielle Davis September 11, 2009 Mr. Davis’ 4th Grade Dear Yahsmeene, I went to a place called Death Falls Camp in Ohio. I went there by bus. It took one week to get there. On the way there, we stopped by our Aunt Lina and Uncle Larry’s. They took us to a scary and creepy graveyard that was in their backyard. Some of the gravestones we saw had the names of their children that went to Death Falls Camp and died mysteriously. The only reason I went to my Aunt and Uncle’s was because my parents wanted me to learn a lesson of not going into dangerous places. When we arrived at Death Falls Camp, I was totally creeped out by the waterfall that had a skull and crossbones floating in midair behind it. When I told others to look at the waterfall, the skull and crossbones disappeared. There is a legend that there are tiny little creatures that live in the water. The legend says that if you go into the water, that you will be eaten up and turn into one of them. My parents and the other children that came to the camp told me to not go into the water. I did not go into the water!! But other children did to see if the legend was true. All of the children that went into the water died and the water turned red. After we left the camp, my parents told me that they were watching me but I did not know. They told me that I learned my lesson because there were dangerous things around me that I avoided. They were glad that I didn’t die from going into the water after I had been told not to. Now they trust me not to do dangerous things. You’re Friend, Gabrielle Death Falls Camp

Gabrielle Davis September 11, 2009
Mr. Davis’ 4th Grade

Dear Yahsmeene,

I went to a place called Death Falls Camp in Ohio. I went there by bus. It took one week to get there. On the way there, we stopped by our Aunt Lina and Uncle Larry’s. They took us to a scary and creepy graveyard that was in their backyard. Some of the gravestones we saw had the names of their children that went to Death Falls Camp and died mysteriously. The only reason I went to my Aunt and Uncle’s was because my parents wanted me to learn a lesson of not going into dangerous places.

When we arrived at Death Falls Camp, I was totally creeped out by the waterfall that had a skull and crossbones floating in midair behind it. When I told others to look at the waterfall, the skull and crossbones disappeared. There is a legend that there are tiny little creatures that live in the water. The legend says that if you go into the water, that you will be eaten up and turn into one of them. My parents and the other children that came to the camp told me to not go into the water. I did not go into the water!! But other children did to see if the legend was true. All of the children that went into the water died and the water turned red.

After we left the camp, my parents told me that they were watching me but I did not know. They told me that I learned my lesson because there were dangerous things around me that I avoided. They were glad that I didn’t die from going into the water after I had been told not to. Now they trust me not to do dangerous things.

You’re Friend,

Gabrielle

]]> Comment on 2. Ahmad’s First Day of School by Derek http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/ahmads-first-day-of-school/comment-page-1/#comment-351 Derek Fri, 18 Sep 2009 17:07:45 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/ahmads-first-day-of-school/#comment-351 A Day at Pony Express with Ahmad I had a great day at Pony Express with Ahmad when Ahmad beat everyone in kickball. People got so jealous they told on us for no reason, but it didn’t work. We went to explore the halls because Ahmad hit three balls over the fence, so I showed him all about the school. I still feel that I should’ve done that first though. Fortunately, he was smart and already knew the classrooms already. I showed him my former classes where I started GATE. I also told him about other classes too, like the ones we are going to be in. They are Mrs. Sanamadi and Mrs. Melvin. They all had different characteristics like different signs, less computers, less posters, and not that much computers as us. We were about to go to others, but the bell rang, so we went back to class. You can tell Ahmad didn’t want to come back to class. When we entered the classroom, it was really dark I thought there was a blackout at first. I tried to reach the light switch, but I couldn’t find it. At last, Ahmad opened the light. We thought it was empty, but the class was under the desks and yelled, “Welcome Ahmad!!!!” After that day, Ahmad wasn’t depressed anymore again. A Day at Pony Express with Ahmad

I had a great day at Pony Express with Ahmad when Ahmad beat everyone in kickball. People got so jealous they told on us for no reason, but it didn’t work. We went to explore the halls because Ahmad hit three balls over the fence, so I showed him all about the school. I still feel that I should’ve done that first though. Fortunately, he was smart and already knew the classrooms already.

I showed him my former classes where I started GATE. I also told him about other classes too, like the ones we are going to be in. They are Mrs. Sanamadi and Mrs. Melvin. They all had different characteristics like different signs, less computers, less posters, and not that much computers as us. We were about to go to others, but the bell rang, so we went back to class. You can tell Ahmad didn’t want to come back to class.

When we entered the classroom, it was really dark I thought there was a blackout at first. I tried to reach the light switch, but I couldn’t find it. At last, Ahmad opened the light. We thought it was empty, but the class was under the desks and yelled, “Welcome Ahmad!!!!” After that day, Ahmad wasn’t depressed anymore again.

]]> Comment on 2. Ahmad’s First Day of School by Kaitlyn http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/ahmads-first-day-of-school/comment-page-1/#comment-350 Kaitlyn Fri, 18 Sep 2009 17:04:12 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/ahmads-first-day-of-school/#comment-350 My School Day with Ahmad This morning I came to school assigned to show Ahmad and not be rude to him. When we went outside having a fun time playing outside. All of a sudden cats and dogs started raining from the sky. We had to take cover in the classroom. Everybody was going insane when we got inside. Ahmad asked me “Is it always like this?” “No.” I replied. The cats and dogs got in. We had to stand on top of our desks as the cats and dogs lay there the floor. Ahmad turned on the radio. It annoyed the cats and dogs so much that one by one they escaped through the door. We all applauded Ahmad and shouted horray for him. When he got home he had a big fat smile. My School Day with Ahmad
This morning I came to school assigned to show Ahmad and not be rude to him. When we went outside having a fun time playing outside. All of a sudden cats and dogs started raining from the sky. We had to take cover in the classroom. Everybody was going insane when we got inside. Ahmad asked me “Is it always like this?” “No.” I replied. The cats and dogs got in. We had to stand on top of our desks as the cats and dogs lay there the floor. Ahmad turned on the radio. It annoyed the cats and dogs so much that one by one they escaped through the door. We all applauded Ahmad and shouted horray for him. When he got home he had a big fat smile.

]]> Comment on 2. Ahmad’s First Day of School by Alex Thomas http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/ahmads-first-day-of-school/comment-page-1/#comment-348 Alex Thomas Fri, 18 Sep 2009 17:02:53 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/ahmads-first-day-of-school/#comment-348 A Day With Ahmad Its Ahmad and my first day of school. We had a picnic and you ate all the food! You were so full that you blew up! You were all over us. You got put back together. You got sent to the office for eating all the food. Went to class and Mr. Davis said “hello Ahmad welcome to our class.” We went to recess and played wall ball. That was the worst day of school. I invited you over my house. We played video games. I taught you how to skateboard. You were better than me! We went swimming, you didn’t know how so I taught you. That night I asked if you could sleep over. We stayed up all night and ate junk food. You didn’t know what it tasted like so I said just try it. I’m glad you moved here! A Day With Ahmad

Its Ahmad and my first day of school. We had a picnic and you ate all the food! You were so full that you blew up! You were all over us. You got put back together. You got sent to the office for eating all the food. Went to class and Mr. Davis said “hello Ahmad welcome to our class.” We went to recess and played wall ball. That was the worst day of school.

I invited you over my house. We played video games. I taught you how to skateboard. You were better than me! We went swimming, you didn’t know how so I taught you.

That night I asked if you could sleep over. We stayed up all night and ate junk food. You didn’t know what it tasted like so I said just try it. I’m glad you moved here!

]]> Comment on 1. Vacation Paper by Aaron http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/where-is-this/comment-page-1/#comment-346 Aaron Thu, 17 Sep 2009 21:28:30 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/where-is-this/#comment-346 Dear Alexander, I went to build a roller coaster and it was awesome. My sister, Candice wants to tell on mom for it. I have a platypus named Perry, and I don’t know where he goes. Anyway, my roller coaster was the cool and fast. My pet, Perry was fighting this evil scientist named Dr. Doofensmerts He made a ray that makes the Tri-State area an ice age! Then, I went on the roller coaster and it disappeared. Candace never busted me. My pet, Perry defeated Dr. Doofensmerts, and came back to me like nothing happened. Sincerely, Aaron. Dear Alexander,

I went to build a roller coaster and it was awesome. My sister, Candice wants to tell on mom for it. I have a platypus named Perry, and I don’t know where he goes. Anyway, my roller coaster was the cool and fast. My pet, Perry was fighting this evil scientist named Dr. Doofensmerts He made a ray that makes the Tri-State area an ice age! Then, I went on the roller coaster and it disappeared. Candace never busted me. My pet, Perry defeated Dr. Doofensmerts, and came back to me like nothing happened.

Sincerely,
Aaron.

]]> Comment on 1. Vacation Paper by Vincent http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/where-is-this/comment-page-1/#comment-345 Vincent Thu, 17 Sep 2009 21:28:13 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/where-is-this/#comment-345 Dear Calvin, I went to Santa Cruz for my vacation. I went to my mom’s friend’s son’s apartment. We stayed there till Saturday. The next day we went to Boardwalk. Over there at Boardwalk there are a lot of rides there. At Boardwalk there is Bump Cars which is like Bumper Cars. There are Sea Swings, The Fireball, something like a pirate ship but it goes forward and back but there are wheels on it’s sides they help the pirate ship go forward and back higher, something that only goes up and down but me and my mom’s friend’s son had a good view up there but to get on a ride you have to make a silly face to get on a ride or you can’t get ride the ride. Me and my mom ate lunch. Next, we went on more rides and I’ll tell you more rides something that is like riding in a car, something that is almost the same but goes faster, something that hang gliders, and The Big Dipper. That’s almost all the rides I went on but I forgot the names. Sincerely, Vincent Dear Calvin,
I went to Santa Cruz for my vacation. I went to my mom’s friend’s son’s apartment. We stayed there till Saturday. The next day we went to Boardwalk. Over there at Boardwalk there are a lot of rides there. At Boardwalk there is Bump Cars which is like Bumper Cars. There are Sea Swings, The Fireball, something like a pirate ship but it goes forward and back but there are wheels on it’s sides they help the pirate ship go forward and back higher, something that only goes up and down but me and my mom’s friend’s son had a good view up there but to get on a ride you have to make a silly face to get on a ride or you can’t get ride the ride. Me and my mom ate lunch. Next, we went on more rides and I’ll tell you more rides something that is like riding in a car, something that is almost the same but goes faster, something that hang gliders, and The Big Dipper.
That’s almost all the rides I went on but I forgot the names.

Sincerely,
Vincent

]]> Comment on 1. Vacation Paper by Micah http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/where-is-this/comment-page-1/#comment-344 Micah Thu, 17 Sep 2009 21:14:28 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/where-is-this/#comment-344 Dear Derek, This is my vacation with Troy Polaumula .We went on the Steelers field and played football .Then we went to his house and played video games .Next we went swimming. Next I got home sick I wanted to go home .Then I went home to have some fun with my family. After that I went on an other vacation at L.A then we came back real quick .Finally we lived happily ever after. You’re friend,Micah Dear Derek,

This is my vacation with Troy Polaumula .We went on the Steelers field and played football .Then we went to his house and played video games .Next we went swimming. Next I got home sick I wanted to go home .Then I went home to have some fun with my family. After that I went on an other vacation at L.A then we came back real quick .Finally we lived happily ever after. You’re friend,Micah

]]> Comment on 1. Vacation Paper by Xion http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/where-is-this/comment-page-1/#comment-343 Xion Thu, 17 Sep 2009 21:11:18 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/where-is-this/#comment-343 Dear Tim, On my summer vacation I took a trip to the Bahamas. I did things like going to the beach, I rode in a limo, and I went swimming. Alex won the lottery and gave me 1000 dollars and I am giving you 500 dollars I went to a dancing competition and someone named Sui-Lin won and got this cool trophy and let me have it .This is the best trip ever! Sincerely, Xion Dear Tim,

On my summer vacation I took a trip to the Bahamas. I did things like going to the beach, I rode in a limo, and I went swimming. Alex won the lottery and gave me 1000 dollars and I am giving you 500 dollars

I went to a dancing competition and someone named Sui-Lin won and got this cool trophy and let me have it .This is the best trip ever!

Sincerely,
Xion

]]> Comment on 1. Vacation Paper by Kiajanee http://mrd90.edublogs.org/writing-assignments/where-is-this/comment-page-1/#comment-342 Kiajanee Thu, 17 Sep 2009 21:10:11 +0000 http://mrd90.edublogs.org/where-is-this/#comment-342 Dear Jaydean, I am going to tell you about my dream vacation to New York. In New York I would explore and go see new things. The new things I would explore is the Statue of Liberty because I have never seen it before and it would be very cool. Other things I would go see is the malls, the state, and see the homes. Why I would go do these things is because I have never there and because I want to see what its like to be in New York. Also, I would go to New York because get to meet new people and make new friends so that I wouldn’t be board. That’s why I would go to New York and for the Fourth of July. Also, that’s why I would like New York. Sincerely Kiajanee Dear Jaydean,

I am going to tell you about my dream vacation to New York. In New York I would explore and go see new things.
The new things I would explore is the Statue of Liberty because I have never seen it before and it would be very cool. Other things I would go see is the malls, the state, and see the homes. Why I would go do these things is because I have never there and because I want to see what its like to be in New York.

Also, I would go to New York because get to meet new people and make new friends so that I wouldn’t be board. That’s why I would go to New York and for the Fourth of July. Also, that’s why I would like New York.

Sincerely
Kiajanee

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